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Decided to combine the American Cinquain and the Spanish Quintilla into a "new" poetic form.
Five lines
Iambic
2 syllable first line
4 syllable second
6 syllable third
8 syllable fourth
2 syllable fifth
Two end rhymes, no ending couplet (e.g. ABABAB, ABBAB, ABBBA, ABAAB)
It's difficult to get something good. Maybe I should try haiku principles.
Thoughts?
@SuperSnekFriend @karna @Tactical @flux_the_cat @BowsacNoodle
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@nine2fivestudio @Tactical @SuperSnekFriend @flux_the_cat @karna I like that structure, but I LOVE the idea of stringing together a bunch of haikus to make a spell. That's some really cool wordplay!
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I use rhymezone often, but I don't like it because I consider it cheating.
To be clear, I don't want to use haiku specifically. I was looking for a short form from the western European tradition for air elemental spells. After discovering both the American cinquain and the Spanish quintilla, I decided to combine them. With the cinquain, there are longer forms which involve mirroring the structure:
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8
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^ for "butterfly" mirror
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^ for strict mirror
What's getting me is the final two syllable line. It's difficult to finish off an idea. Perhaps I should use iambic commands on both the first and final lines. I have to play around with it.
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Also, I don't want to string together several stanzas and would prefer to limit things to the butterfly or strict mirror. The idea is to keep the spell airy and light in weight.
nine2fivestudio
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