@Rasp I think a lot of people would like to see more of Detruona's new form, see how she changes and adapts to the environment, and see how the story concludes. It's pretty good as-is in terms of style but watch out for errors like "The mere fact Detruona awake surprised her" in the first chapter. I suppose it's a sketch more than a finished painting, so that's ok. I recommend you use "languagetool", a spellcheck extension for chrome and firefox. If you introduce new characters and make them interact uniquely, it'll be really interesting.