@ZachWeinersmith a lot of your … alliteration, and rhythm, seems as competent and mature as Silverstein
Silverstein was one of the few children’s poets who didn’t just care about rhyme and neglect the meter. Reading it to my kids always feels like giving them a gateway to more mature stuff. Bea Wolf feels the same way— my girls pick up on the rhythm and alliteration of your lines, and it interests them without the use of cheap rhymes