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K-ZO da Snowman (kzodasnowman@spore.social)'s status on Friday, 22-Mar-2024 03:28:53 JST K-ZO da Snowman
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Passive voice suckkkkkkks. Good thread on good faith!
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  This subhed: "Yurok Tribe, which had 90% of its territory taken during the gold rush, will get 125 acres returned after it was stolen in the mid-1800s" This grammar puts the onus on the Yurok Tribe, who 'had' their territory taken or stolen. Like it was their fault. Try: "The Yurok Tribe, 90% of whose land was STOLEN BY AMERICANS during the gold rush..." Less comfortable, maybe, but it doesn't obscure and protect the perps. 🍵
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  Paul Cantrell (inthehands@hachyderm.io)'s status on Friday, 22-Mar-2024 03:31:30 JST Paul Cantrell
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  Agreed, and your original PV construction was better for that reason. The crime is not the grammar; the crime is obscuring the actor. Your revision was and is solid.
  
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  Toastie (toastie@journa.host)'s status on Friday, 22-Mar-2024 03:31:31 JST Toastie
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  @kzodasnowman Active voice would be "Americans took 90% of the Yurok Tribe's territory..." but that makes Americans the subject instead of the Yurok Tribe.
  
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  K-ZO da Snowman (kzodasnowman@spore.social)'s status on Friday, 22-Mar-2024 03:31:32 JST K-ZO da Snowman
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  @Toastie also the correction names the actor, which is at least partially out of passive? Now I have to re-educate myself on passive, heh
  
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  K-ZO da Snowman (kzodasnowman@spore.social)'s status on Friday, 22-Mar-2024 03:31:33 JST K-ZO da Snowman
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  @Toastie there's a difference in scale of impact between your use and the article's use 😂
  
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  Toastie (toastie@journa.host)'s status on Friday, 22-Mar-2024 03:31:34 JST Toastie
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  @kzodasnowman In fairness (and to my chagrin) my correction was in PV too 😅
  
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